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Microfiction Monday #50

Susan from Stony River, welcomes us to Microfiction Monday,
where a picture paints just 140 characters.

If you’d like to join us, stop by Susan’s, pick up the picture prompt,
compose your story in 140 character (or less), post it,
and sign in at Susan’s place, then commence in the sharing!

Fat, fifty, and divorced with three kids; Ariel sat by the sea mourning the loss of her youth, beauty, tail, and immortality.


    1. Mar — this is the truth of those fairy tales with the “happily ever after” endings. However, Disney changed this fairy tale. Originally the mermaid died because the human didn’t love her in the first place.

  1. Maybe I am reading too much into your micro, but was she once a mermaid that became human? Instantly I thought of this when you mention “tail”! And the fact that immortality is lost suggests maybe she was a mermaid! Even without my interpretation, this is very lovely!

    1. Gemma — I always forget that American culture isn’t universal! Disney updated Han’s Christian Anderson’s, Little Mermaid, named her Ariel and gave her a “happily ever after” ending. This is my take on her “happily ever after”.

    1. Kelley — that’s funny. This was one of my least favorite Disney fairytales for that exact same reason. This does seem like the logical consequence of such selfish behavior.

  2. Poor Ariel, I guess her Prince Eric wasn’t her Prince Charming like she thought. Walt would be Amused Really funny Microfiction, I enjoyed this one.

    1. Bill — I think Walt would be annoyed with me. He was a dictator when it came to his creative vision and he wouldn’t care for my twist. I am glad you liked it though.

    1. Jabblog — Ariel was a name carefully chosen. I am referring to Disney’s version of, “The Little Mermaid.” See my comment to Gemma.

  3. Oh, poor Ariel! Mermaids are much over rated though. They smell of fish. This was a creative way to take the picture. Well done!

  4. I love this, Quilly..Life’s reflections…Bravo!

    Mine is up

    Have you a Blessed Week!

    p.s YOU are looking GREAT! Love your new photo!

  5. You and Michael G-G are very clever! You are the ony 2 who noted that my microfiction “Still” was not all sweet and strupy! I tried to imbue a subtle sense of something else in this micro. The clues are “locked” and “a still”…something frozen in time…like a still from a movie…There’s the sadness…She dreams of a moment that progresses nowhere…Something happened on the honeymoon!

  6. Can we envision 50 and Fabulous rather than fat? Or at least substitute fluffy? 🙂

    You made me smile and on a Monday, that’s always good!

  7. Oh–I really like this one–I had an aunt who said that she was’ fat, fifty and free’ but there was no way that she was a mermaid!!! Thanks for this–made me smile. Cheers!

  8. That’s what happens when you hit fifty, Quilly! 🙂 Regardless of how good you have it you’ll still feel that there is less for you than you deserve. Ambitions will ebb.

  9. .
    Just realized she’d lost her TAIL. Ha!! 🙂
    My mine read that as TALL so the tail part didn’t make much sense to me.

  10. Very clever! Disney doesn’t usually show what happens years down the road, and Ariel was so willful and disobedient, without a change of heart this is probably what she’d come to.

    I waited up for Punny Monday (or rather woke up after falling asleep on the couch) but I don’t see it yet and need to get to bed.

  11. The comments you got are as entertaining as your piece. I didn’t care for Disney’s version either. I prefer most of the originals.

  12. SUPERB!
    I always wished that someone would do an AFTER-the-happy-ever-after, like the Frog Prince Continued did.

    Just, thank God she’s still not wearing those purple clamshell boobholders.

    And yes, I’m right there with her these days LOL

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